(I don't really have a beta for this, sorry... I'd be glad if anyone could point out my mistakes.)
The 'Sapphire Phantom' is a known master thief, who steals a lot of stuff and the police just seems to be unable to catch him. He even is quite popular with the media. But what happens, when there is something he wants which can’t be stolen so easily? And then it's a policeman of all things, really?
Now, read a story about the strange ways a loving man can go to achieve what he wants while struggling with not getting caught and... his siblings?
The Phantom Thief
Erstellt: 13.09.2011
Letzte Änderung: 14.12.2011
Letzte Änderung: 14.12.2011
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Englisch
20043 Wörter, 15 Kapitel
20043 Wörter, 15 Kapitel
Thema: Eigene Serie
Kapitel | Datum | Andere Formate | Daten |
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~komplette Fanfic~ | V: 13.09.2011 U: 14.12.2011 |
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Prologue | E: 14.09.2011 U: 14.09.2011 |
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Chapter one | E: 14.09.2011 U: 14.09.2011 |
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Chapter two | E: 20.09.2011 U: 20.09.2011 |
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Chapter three | E: 27.09.2011 U: 27.09.2011 |
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Chapter four | E: 05.10.2011 U: 05.10.2011 |
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Chapter five | E: 13.10.2011 U: 13.10.2011 |
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Chapter six | E: 20.10.2011 U: 20.10.2011 |
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Chapter seven | E: 26.10.2011 U: 26.10.2011 |
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Chapter eight | E: 02.11.2011 U: 02.11.2011 |
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Chapter nine | E: 11.11.2011 U: 11.11.2011 |
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Chapter ten | E: 16.11.2011 U: 16.11.2011 |
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Chapter eleven | E: 30.11.2011 U: 30.11.2011 |
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Chapter twelve | E: 30.11.2011 U: 30.11.2011 |
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Chapter thirteen | E: 08.12.2011 U: 08.12.2011 |
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Chapter fourteen | E: 14.12.2011 U: 14.12.2011 |
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Yuri
Age: 22
Profession: master thief
Yuri is actually a pretty decent guy, even though he likes stealing from rich guys. Sure, he's cheeky with a pretty big ego, but he's also surprisingly nice, if one gets the chance to speak with him.
He has a strange love for flowers, especially roses, with unnatural colours and a not so strange obsession with certain video games.
He plays the main part in his family - meaning he is the one that actually steals everything - while his siblings support him in different ways. -
Alan
Age: 21
Profession: police officer
Alan is the poor (?) police officer that has caught Yuris interest. He's a bright young man with his own ideals and a strong sense of justice, but he's just not prepared for the whirlwind of action that Yuri brings into his life.
Normally he's pretty calm and if he's alone and has time on hand he likes to write, but that happens less and less these days...
He seems to be the only one who even remotely gets what's going on in Yuris head but he tries everything to use that information to finally arrest the thief. -
Lucy
Age: 20
Profession: hacker, mechanic
Lucy is so to speak the pet of the family, though she certainly doesn't behave like that.
She's lively, a little bit crazy and sometimes brutally honest. Also, she likes to dye her hair the strangest colours, right now she favours red, though.
She doesn't show it all too often, but she, too, worries about her brothers when they are out and about again.
Her job is assisting Yuri in picking out his locations for his thefts and besides that she likes hacking herself into different high-security websites. Her other 'job' is to reuse most of the stolen stuff and to create other useful things out of it. And she's certainly imaginative. -
Lily
Age: 26
Profession: tailor, wig and make-up designer, medic, chef
Lily is the oldest of the four siblings and took over the role of the 'mother'. As she almost never leaves the house, she mostly sticks to the chores, like cleaning or cooking, but her Online Shop needs plenty of attention too.
She's mostly worried about Yuri, as she fears he'll get caught one day, so she has developed a habit of making his favorite dish the day after a theft. But of course the other two also get a lot of attention and love from their oldest sister.
While her siblings play the 'criminal' part, Lily herself does mostly legal stuff, meaning she produces and sells high-quality outfits and wigs to pay the rent of their home and to buy more material. -
Alec
Age: 22
Profession: assistant thief
Yuris twin brother is, even though he's the younger one, a more mature version of him. He's simply calmer, a little bit more level-headed and not as cheeky as his brother. In fact, he's rather shy in front of strangers.
Good for him, then, that he's mostly at home, playing video games with his brother or helping Lily with the chores, or at his boyfriends house, with whom he has had a happy relationship for five years now.
His mission is probably the easiest, as well as the most stressful one, as he has to supervise Yuris actions from the background to help him if he actually gets caught or anything. Though it actually isn't needed most of the time as his brother is surprisingly careful, even if he doesn't seem so.
Heh, das neue Kapitel gefällt mir sehr gut. :)
Hat der arme Polizist es leider nicht geschafft ihn dingfest zu machen.
Der Kuss, um Alan aus der Fassung zu bringen, fand ich echt genial. Das Gesicht hätte ich zu gerne gesehen.
Dein Englisch ist auch ziemlich gut. Weiter so!!!
Hat der arme Polizist es leider nicht geschafft ihn dingfest zu machen.
Der Kuss, um Alan aus der Fassung zu bringen, fand ich echt genial. Das Gesicht hätte ich zu gerne gesehen.
Dein Englisch ist auch ziemlich gut. Weiter so!!!
Kommentar zu: Chapter four
Yay, ein neues Kapitel! :)
Schade, dass nichts besonderes passiert ist. Aber wie es aussieht, geht's ja im nächsten Kapitel richtig los. Diamanten, das ist'n heißes Pflaster.
Schade, dass nichts besonderes passiert ist. Aber wie es aussieht, geht's ja im nächsten Kapitel richtig los. Diamanten, das ist'n heißes Pflaster.
Kommentar zu: Chapter three
Klasse Story. *.*
Dein Schreibstil ist sehr flüssig und nachvollziehbar. Die Dialoge sind auch sehr gut und man kann sich in den Protagonisten hineinversetzen.
Ich hab nur eine Frage, im ersten Kapitel hat Yuri ja erzählt, dass sie hauptsächlich reiche Leute bestehlen. Wieso also hat er es dann nötig, zwei Geschäfte zu bestehlen? Von dem Zeug, was sie den Reichen abnehmen, sollte doch eigentlich ganz gut was für sie abfallen.
Die erste Begegnung zwischen Yuri und Alan (wenn er's war) im zweiten Kapitel gefiel mir. Ein bischen Action. XD lol
Bin gespannt, wie es weitergeht. O.o
Dein Schreibstil ist sehr flüssig und nachvollziehbar. Die Dialoge sind auch sehr gut und man kann sich in den Protagonisten hineinversetzen.
Ich hab nur eine Frage, im ersten Kapitel hat Yuri ja erzählt, dass sie hauptsächlich reiche Leute bestehlen. Wieso also hat er es dann nötig, zwei Geschäfte zu bestehlen? Von dem Zeug, was sie den Reichen abnehmen, sollte doch eigentlich ganz gut was für sie abfallen.
Die erste Begegnung zwischen Yuri und Alan (wenn er's war) im zweiten Kapitel gefiel mir. Ein bischen Action. XD lol
Bin gespannt, wie es weitergeht. O.o
Kommentar zu: Chapter two